Final Revision

Final Revision

Work Time Options

Opening

This is the final class period you will have to work on your narrative, and it must be finished and submitted before the next lesson.

Look through the Work Time options and select how you will spend today’s class time. Share your choice with your teacher.

  1. Write, write, write: I have a good sense of what I need to accomplish and I will use all the time available to finish writing my final draft.
  2. Peer conference: I have been working with a classmate who I believe will be able to give me more useful feedback as I put the finishing touches on my revision. We will read each other’s work and talk through changes, then write.
  3. Descriptive language, active verbs, and rhythm: I believe that my draft is strong in structure and development, and I want to enhance my language use. I will revise for active verbs, descriptive language, and sentence rhythm, using the protocol we practiced in Lesson 19.
  4. Language use: I believe that my draft is strong, but I am unsure about my language use. I will use the work we did in Lesson 22 to edit my final draft for grammar and conventions.

Your Character Narrative

Work Time

Work on your final revision of Your Character Narrative. If you finish one of the Work Time options, you may move on to another. When you’re ready, look through the extension options on the next screen to see if any appeal to you.

  • Write, write, write: I have a good sense of what I need to accomplish and I will use all the time available to finish writing my final draft.
  • Peer conference: I have been working with a classmate who I believe will be able to give me more useful feedback as I put the finishing touches on my revision. We will read each other’s work and talk through changes, then write.
  • Descriptive language, active verbs, and rhythm: I believe that my draft is strong in structure and development, and I want to enhance my language use. I will revise for active verbs, descriptive language, and sentence rhythm, using the protocol we practiced in Lesson 19:
    • Underline uses of the verb “to be” and consider if there is a stronger way to convey the same meaning.
    • Indicate examples of active verbs.
    • Indicate examples of descriptive language.
    • Mark the end of each sentence with slashes (/). Look at the sentence length: is it varied? What thoughts or ideas are emphasized due to sentences that “pop” or stand out? What kind of mood does the sentence structure create?
    • Look back at what you have discovered about your writing. What changes can you make to strengthen it?
  • Language use: I believe that my draft is strong, but I am unsure about my language use. I will use the work we did in Lesson 22 to edit my final draft for grammar and conventions.

Extension Options

Work Time

Congratulations! You’ve completed Your Character Narrative. Now, you can enhance your work with a variety of extension options. Read through the following choices and see if any appeal to you.

  • Cover and illustrations: Create a cover and several illustrations for your narrative. Your cover should convey something about the message of your work, perhaps using symbolism; the illustrations should depict important scenes from the work.
  • Poetry or song lyrics: Write a poem or the lyrics to a song about a theme that appears in your narrative.
  • Letter: Write a letter from your character to any other person who appears in your narrative, explaining your character’s actions, providing your thoughts about his or her actions, and asking any questions you might have about their motivations or actions.
  • Other: Do you have a creative idea to enrich your work? Clear it with your teacher, and then have fun!

Still to Do

Closing

What did you get done today? Did you accomplish your goals? What do you still have to finish before submitting this narrative?

  • Write one sentence explaining your progress and share it with your teacher.

Open Notebook

Your Character Narrative

Homework

This is it!

  • Finish the final draft of your narrative and submit it.

Over the next five lessons, as you work on your personal narrative, take some time to look through the work your classmates have submitted to see some different ways of writing narratives.